She set her sights on the fine young lad
Said "I know how to make him mine."
Took out her recipes and she cooked
All sorts of foods most divine!
She sent cookies up to his office
Sugar and oatmeal-raisin
On the tray was her telephone number
Oh my! but the girl was brazen!
He asked her out for that Friday
A movie, dinner, and dancing
She accepted demurely but devised impurely
More gastronomic romancing.
She brought him lunches to work every weekday
Sandwiches, salads, and treats
Muffins and cupcakes, hoagies and cheesesteaks
No dish was too great a feat.
He fell for her just as she'd planned it
They married one day the next spring
He kept eating her chow and came time for the vow
With his finger too fat for the ring!
They were the perfect of couples
She baked him all flavors of pies
He ate all her food and she fed him real good
But all that he fed her were lies.
The best way to man's heart's through his stomach
She'd followed those words to her best
But when she found out he was cheating on her
Then she shot him straight through the chest!
|image by lolita-art at deviantart.com|
submitted for Poetry Potluck: Food, Drink, and Indulgence
also for Poetry Potluck: Lies, Deception, and Misrepresentation
Oh my. Quite a shock at the end! A little whimsy and then it ends with a bullet to the chest. Sounds like most of my love stories!
Great piece, thanks for sharing with us!
LOL. I think we are going one way, then, Yank, Bam, Surprise!
Whoa! Well done. Good spin ... Nice the way you pulled it together for both challenges. :-)
Poem on ...
P.S.: I love the title of the poem! Bravo!
Awesome poem! The plot, rhythym AND rhyme carried me forward nicely until BANG! The twist. Well done. :)
My Potluck Poem: Bacon Wrapped Nest Keg
LOL, i like the ending! maybe she should have impaled him on a kebab!
I like the flow of the structure.
I'm quite shocked at the end and then I realized, she just gave it a shot -- loving too much!
I love your words but why a bullet at the end?
No messing with this girl. Great poem. Thanks for the comment on d blog by the way, will check out later as running around like a mad woman today.
bang! and the food spills.. here's mine lola.. http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/04/27/cheesecake/
I guess he got his just desserts!! Very well written..but she'll have a very high price to pay!! Too bad...
Oh my, indeed ... delightfully treacherous!!!
Hmm..she was a wonderful wife indeed.true...the best way to man's heart's through his stomach..
The poetic story was well written
OUCH!! Good thing she didn't shoot him in the stomach.. it would've oozed food instead of blood..
An awesome story, Lola.. serves that cheating hubby right!!
Oh God.. but now you've made me hungry....
What a story, *************************************
Someone is Special
So fun. Enjoyed the easy rhyme and the story!
so funny, i loved every line!!
here's my piece if you wanna check if out :)
I love this piece!
Nice! The image is just right. I love the way you craft these.
wooo! nice work ;)
hoho the final verdict is painful .. nice write lola..here's my potluck http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/01/25/paper-scribbles/
Serves him just right! Man, he just got served.. haah!!
Till the last line it went on a playful note and then- BANG.. very well written! Great piece :)
Perfect...an absolutely perfect tale.
LOL! This was delightful, as most of your stuff is, lolamouse. :) Definitely a favorite now.
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