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| Don't Forget Your Light" by Sudlice at Deviant Art |
Bare floors
Barely even here
Another place
Another name
Another empty year
Wasted time
Wasted tries
Wasted every night
Can't outrun
Can't stay here
Don't forget your light.
submitted for Midnight Snack, 1, at Poets United
13 comments:
def tension in this one...the last line counter to the rest...alone can be painful...
you are such a quick talent. well done entry.
Brilliant!
Love the repetition, the glimpse without glare. Well done!
http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/09/06/on-her-way-out/
Loved it - very vivid!
I liked this very much. - mosk
Really enjoyed the flow.
I hear you! I feel the same way about light.
So sad. I know this feeling to which you give poignant word.
Love this... thanks.
Stark and right in your face. Love it.
This is a stark emotive piece.
Oh, I love this lola!! "And don't forget your light"... I think I've lived this poem (perhaps even more than once...)
Pearl
lovely reminder in your title.
wow.
smiles.
invite you to share a Haiku or a poem of your choice to poets rally week 51 today.
a free verse or a haiku is welcome.
keep up the excellence!
xoxox
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