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Poetry is just the evidence of life. If your life is burning well, poetry is just the ash. Leonard Cohen

Friday, July 29, 2011

Nursery Rhyme Royal

When Goldilocks awoke she saw the bear
and started to get up to run away
but saw upon Bear's face such raw despair

"I promise not to bite you if you'll stay.
I've never had a friend to come and play."

So Goldie and the Bear stayed up all night
with movies, popcorn, pizza til the light.

23 comments:

Heaven said...

nice creative twist on the nursery story...

as to the form, I will that for Gay to comment ~

Pat Hatt said...

haha that was really well done
Using royal nursery rhyme fun
Right up my alley I will say
Royal rhyme caused you no dismay

Great write!

Mama Zen said...

This is fabulous!

Brian Miller said...

ha, nice...like your remix on the traditional nursery rhyme...even bears need friends...

truly said...

This is such a fun write. Love the photo!

Fireblossom said...

Yay! Bears can be very nice sometimes, and need friends, too!

M. A. S. said...

That was fun.

Tom Eliot said...

BRILLIANT! A fun and entertaining way of practising the structure.

Choc full of personality
the imagery is great...the pic sets the scene.

hedgewitch said...

I'm glad someone dares to be unserious around here..I loved this way to use a solemn narrative form to retell a child's tale and charm adults.

Lolamouse said...

@hedgewitch: You can always count on me to be unserious! Especially when something so obviously calls out for seriousness!

Bryan M. White said...

For some reason I find that bear in the picture incredibly creepy.

Laurie Kolp said...

lol- Thanks for the chuckle... much needed with such a 'serious' form!

ayala said...

This is dreamy !

Beachanny said...

I loved this. So creative, so playful, just the right length - correct in form and meter. It's entertaining, accurate, and extremely creative.
Lovely! Thanks for writing, linking, and being part of the forum today.

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Oh, I love it! And I note that it's a perfect example of the form, too, :)

nene said...

It's nice to put a nice 'lite' on the 'bear' thingy. Especially after the recent bear maulings that have been reported up in Alaska.
I didn't know you could be so unserious in such serious matters. "...are you serious"?

Umesh Rao said...

Amazing :)
Cute and a sweet poem!
Loved reading it :)

darev2005 said...

Hee hee hee! Keep waiting for somebody to jump up and say "Hey! This is poetry, dammit! There's no time for silliness! This is serious business here!"

MISH said...

Definitely a nursery rhyme with a difference ... fun and light-hearted !

Jingle Poetry said...

cool write.

Rachel Hoyt said...

Hehe. Very cool nursery rhyme. :) I've been having a bit of with this style lately too (though not on my blog).

gautami tripathy said...

Liked this!

:D
hibernation revisited

imnotaverse said...

lol! Fun and entertaining.