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Poetry is just the evidence of life. If your life is burning well, poetry is just the ash. Leonard Cohen

Monday, July 11, 2011

Storm

People of Chilmark, Thomas Hart Benton, 1920
Quickly carry the boat back to shore
Black is the sky, the waves are high
The Hyades cry in grief
The Pleiades are dark
We plead with the gods
Heavens rain down
Atlas weak
Save our 
Souls

submitted for Magpie Tales 73

18 comments:

zongrik said...

I like how this is not supposed to rhyme, but you snuck a rhyme into the second line.

Mama Zen said...

Fabulous job with the form! I really enjoyed this.

Everyday Goddess said...

an epic struggle! the Gods will have their way though.

Beachanny said...

Dark days and we reach to our myths for experience, wisdom, courage, and the ability not to repeat mistakes. With these short lines you capture the raison d'etre of philosophy and the arts. Well done. Thank you for writing and linking today. Gay

hedgewitch said...

Very cool--quite a sense of turmoil and confusion, senselessness, wildness all kinds of stuff, kind of like life these days. Liked it much.

Kay L. Davies said...

Excellent! Perfect for the prompt!
— K

Kay, Alberta, Canada
An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous Travel

Brian Miller said...

nice blend of mythology in there...how many gods will it take to save us now...

Reflections said...

Fabulous write... love the tie beyond.

Rinkly Rimes said...

The picture certainly has the air of a Greek tragedy, even if we take the swim-suits into account.

Martin H. said...

You convey the sense of panic, well.

darev2005 said...

Homer would have loved that. Isn't there a name for a diminishing line poem? I can't think of it. Like "The Dormouse's Tale" from Alice In Wonderland.

Helen said...

Very nice .... very nice!!!

Tess Kincaid said...

Dark and delicious.

Lyn said...

This is wonderful..you really pulled me into the action...a timeless quality!

Laynee said...

I like. Has a darkness to it.

HyperCRYPTICal said...

Must be a terrible way to go lolamouse - well written.

Anna :o]

Reflections said...

A second response... I responded to your question on mine referring to ASL and sign language: looking up some information on Chilmark people I found an astounding ratio of deaf to hearing of 1 in 25 for over 200 years in that area. See mine for a more in depth explanation.

Donna B said...

You captured the mood!