Mouse Droppings: White Mice

Sunday, July 17, 2011

White Mice

photo courtesy of Rosie Hardy

...and then they led her back to her cell. Her eyes burned; her skin itched. Yellow pus oozed out of a hastily sewn incision on her abdomen. As they locked the door behind her and crawled off, she thought she heard them say, "Don't worry. Their brains are so tiny, they can't feel any pain."

submitted for One Shoot Sunday at One Stop Poetry

13 comments:

Brian Miller said...: oh my...yeah, not cool abusing animals...probaly testing the latest breast implant material...or make up; July 17, 2011 at 4:14 PM
Reflections said...: Excellent piece! Love it, all of it!; July 17, 2011 at 4:25 PM
dustus said...: Ha! Loved how the 55 almost picks up mid-story. Smooth lead into a rather harrowing scene, and with the script-flip of mice doing the insulting. Awesome, LolaMOUSE... unique microfiction!; July 17, 2011 at 4:31 PM
Pat Tillett said...: powerful and thought provoking!
that whole guinea pig process bothers the hell out of me...; July 17, 2011 at 5:03 PM
Fireblossom said...: That kind of thinking drives me up the wall. It's just wrong.; July 17, 2011 at 5:38 PM
Brent Wescott said...: Seems a little 1984 with the heads in rat cages. I like it.

Building Castles on the Beach; July 17, 2011 at 7:26 PM
hedgewitch said...: Always easy to discount the pain you don't feel yourself. Well said, lm.; July 17, 2011 at 8:23 PM
Anonymous said...: :( wow, you don't pull any punches with this one!; July 17, 2011 at 9:19 PM
Anonymous said...: vivid and haunting.
well done.; July 17, 2011 at 9:21 PM
MISH said...: A visual and graphic piece ~ well done !; July 18, 2011 at 12:17 AM
JustRex said...: Ooo.... That made me really uncomfortable.; July 18, 2011 at 9:14 AM
Louise said...: OMG what an image - great flash fiction piece!; July 18, 2011 at 4:38 PM
Anonymous said...: short and powerful. well done.; July 18, 2011 at 11:53 PM

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