photo courtesy of Magpie Tales 65 |
One of God's true little darlings?
If Fioretti were writ new
You'd have roasted all the starlings.
You must believe that you are right
You act with venom and with spite
That cross 'round your neck is a joke
I hope some day it makes you choke.
submitted for Magpie Tales 65
This is my first attempt at a Rispetto poem. It's been revised several times already to fix the meter!
23 comments:
Just a wee bit of anger in there!
I like it...
A lot of respeccto for your first Rispetto! Fun and fabulously done...!
Good one !! really nailed the form and the prompt :)
I love that darlings/starlings rhyme!
Yikes! Strong words and well wrought Rispetto.
For starters...I had no idea what a Rispetto was...I don't get out much...:) Now to this piece...wow...raw emotion. The first time I read it, I was sure it was directed at Francis. The second time I read it, I thought...no, this is directed at someone contemporary. The third time...I'm not sure. That's the beauty of it isn't it? Good job. Vb
you tell it...yes, righteousness first goes to the head in many, missing the windpipe by inches....
VERY well wrought!
Will look up Rispetto... sounds like a dish served up by a Borgia, something to choke a saint?
ooooooooooh!! Dark desires.. woooo
Loved the tight shot..
Hugs xox
I know a few people I could say this to. Good one, Mouse.
And the meter is wonderfully addressed.
The textual context cracked me up. We each have encountered one of these guys!
http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/05/09/courage-in-my-cup/
Ouch - bad Catholic school nuns? Like the Fioretti reference.
well done...
:)
Good one!
Yay! Good one!
Anna :o]
Not a usual Magpie offering...
Well written...
beguiling time
this is a splendid poem and rispetto - i wish i could some day write one like this.
One of my favorite pieces in this batch of saint-based works.
Yay! Good one!
Anna :o]
Trellisimo said: Not a usual Magpie offering...
(gautami said) Well written...
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