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Poetry is just the evidence of life. If your life is burning well, poetry is just the ash. Leonard Cohen

Monday, May 9, 2011

Unsaintly

photo courtesy of Magpie Tales 65
You see yourself a saint, don't you?
One of God's true little darlings?
If Fioretti were writ new
You'd have roasted all the starlings.

You must believe that you are right
You act with venom and with spite
That cross 'round your neck is a joke
I hope some day it makes you choke.

submitted for Magpie Tales 65

This is my first attempt at a Rispetto poem. It's been revised several times already to fix the meter!

23 comments:

Pat Tillett said...

Just a wee bit of anger in there!
I like it...

Lena said...

A lot of respeccto for your first Rispetto! Fun and fabulously done...!

ladynimue said...

Good one !! really nailed the form and the prompt :)

Fireblossom said...

I love that darlings/starlings rhyme!

honeyhaiku said...

Yikes! Strong words and well wrought Rispetto.

versebender said...

For starters...I had no idea what a Rispetto was...I don't get out much...:) Now to this piece...wow...raw emotion. The first time I read it, I was sure it was directed at Francis. The second time I read it, I thought...no, this is directed at someone contemporary. The third time...I'm not sure. That's the beauty of it isn't it? Good job. Vb

Brian Miller said...

you tell it...yes, righteousness first goes to the head in many, missing the windpipe by inches....

Catalyst said...

VERY well wrought!

Lyn said...

Will look up Rispetto... sounds like a dish served up by a Borgia, something to choke a saint?

Olivia said...

ooooooooooh!! Dark desires.. woooo
Loved the tight shot..

Hugs xox

Tess Kincaid said...

I know a few people I could say this to. Good one, Mouse.

Kim Nelson said...

And the meter is wonderfully addressed.
The textual context cracked me up. We each have encountered one of these guys!
http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/05/09/courage-in-my-cup/

Mary said...

Ouch - bad Catholic school nuns? Like the Fioretti reference.

Jingle said...

well done...

:)

Martin H. said...

Good one!

Anna :o] said...

Yay! Good one!

Anna :o]

Trellissimo said...

Not a usual Magpie offering...

gautami tripathy said...

Well written...

beguiling time

trisha said...

this is a splendid poem and rispetto - i wish i could some day write one like this.

Steve Isaak said...

One of my favorite pieces in this batch of saint-based works.

Lolamouse said...

Yay! Good one!

Anna :o]

Lolamouse said...

Trellisimo said: Not a usual Magpie offering...

Lolamouse said...

(gautami said) Well written...