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Poetry is just the evidence of life. If your life is burning well, poetry is just the ash. Leonard Cohen

Thursday, May 19, 2011

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Shoulda listened
I was told
You had no heart
Your blood was cold
You were a snake
In the grass
You played it cool
You played it fast
You fooled me once
Now shame on you
You fool me twice
No, that won't do
You changed your skin
But I can see
There's something you
Must want from me
You think you'll lie
To me again
Well that ain't gonna
Fly my friend
So don't come crawling
Back to me
Feigning your 
Affinity
Go slink back off
Into the weeds
I need no more
Of your slick deeds
Snake in the grass
Yeah, that's right
Cross me again
You'll feel my bite

14 comments:

Fireblossom said...

That's right, get a little r-e-s-p-e-c-t!

Mary said...

The conclusion to this poem is RIGHT ON. Nice writing.

dragonkatet said...

YES! Send that snake crawling back under a rock, lola. >:) well said.

Ginny said...

At least the writer recognizes the snake for what it is. I know people who have these snakes in their life and refuse to see it. Excellent point made. Very poignant. Good piece!!

Henry Clemmons said...

Go ahead and speak your mind, it's okay, don't be bashful :) Great job.

Ella said...

Yes, beware of snake! Believe in you~

Judith C Evans said...

Great buildup to those last lines. Love it!

trisha said...

fantastic poem and amazing conclusion lola. just adored the spirit and the poem.

Eileen T O'Neill ..... said...

lolamouse,

A very strong piece of self defence and a good telling off, for that snake in the grass!!!

Best wishes, Eileen

HyperCRYPTICal said...

Love the rhythm - love it all!

Anna :o]

Jinksy said...

I think it'd be difficult to find any title other than snake in the grass...

Krislin Neo, Ting (Syracuse Pike) said...

Right into the bull's eye of this piece's ending, excellent... Yes, snakes.. everyone has a part of it, is it not? :P

roughwaterjohn said...

I see you have the writer's sight, though the serpent within, longs to bite. :-)

Mr. Walker said...

"You played it cool" - that's a great line for a snake in the grass. Enjoyed this lots - read it twice in a row. Thanks.

Richard