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Poetry is just the evidence of life. If your life is burning well, poetry is just the ash. Leonard Cohen

Thursday, December 15, 2011

The Advance of Middle Age


Her body is an occupied city
The fortress has been seized
The ruin and devastation a pity
Her body is an occupied city
It used to be so bright and pretty
The invading troops can not be appeased
Her body is an occupied city
The fortress has been seized

submitted for Poetry Jam, Occupy This!

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16 comments:

Mary said...

Oh, Lolamouse, what a wonderful verse. I can definitely picture a body as an 'occupied city.' It feels that way especially after a long day. LOL. Love the triolet form. Thanks for 'jamming' with us!

Helen said...

The first word that came to mind? CHARGE! (I love this.)

HyperCRYPTICal said...

I recognise this person - do you know me personally?! :o]

Such is the passage of time!

Anna :o]

Marie Elena said...

Love it, Lolamouse! :D And Imogene Coca -- what hoot!

Marie Elena

Brian Miller said...

wow...nicely done...some really strong lines in there...i dunno i think beauty just changes with age...

Mimi Foxmorton said...

Would that mine were occupied..........
*hee*

xo

nene said...

I chuckle to the comments especially Helen's (my thoughts exactly but I'm primeval that way).
and agree with B. Miller because the eyes, mind and heart are part of the anatomy that ages in synchrony and beauty in simile.

Embrace your beauty.

Margaret said...

...the invading troups... ha.

Oh, isn't Brian's comment just lovely?!! :)

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Very very clever.........I love it, having been occupied with various ailments myself the past years:)

WyomingDiva said...

Lola, I loved this. I feel exactly this way these days...my body has been besieged by middle age nad it's losing, to my dismay....

Peggy said...

I identify with this occupied city! Such an apt metaphor! A creative take on the prompt!

S.E.Ingraham said...

Super triolet Lola - I haven't been to your site before - it's really fun and I love the Blog's Title and Title description; it will have me chuckling all day ... thanks.

Enchanted Oak said...

I feel like giving you a high five, Lolamouse, for this tart testimony to strength in the face of aging. Loved the graphics, too.

Morning said...

love it,

creative thinking on occupy.

Jessica Maybury said...

that's great! When I read it first it seemed trite and then the repetition caught me and made me read again and it's true! We're occupied! Cropburning tactics ahoy!

Pat Tillett said...

That is awesome! And so damn true...
I'm happy with my age and who I am, but geeze what happened to that strapping young man I used to be? gone gone gone...