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| image by Rosie Hardy, self-portrait |
The girl who loved winter
knew warmth
Kissed by a dream
Morpheus seduced
She slept
Snowflakes fell
like sand in her eyes
The wind rocked her
in its icy arms
and sang to her a haunting lullaby
She slept
a deep and primal sleep
A she-bear in her cave
Embraced by long black hair
A blanket of herself
thick and sweet-smelling
The girl who loved winter
cossetted by the cold
felt warm
The winter sheltered her
like a puppy wrapped in an eiderdown quilt
like a puppy wrapped in an eiderdown quilt
A small beating heart
within the vast whiteness.
submitted for Imaginary Garden With Real Toads, Sunday Mini Challenge, First and Last Lines (in which we are to take a last line from a previous poem and make it the first line of a new one. I used two last lines: The Girl Who Loves Winter III and The Longing and made them my first three lines of this one.
9 comments:
Lovely: "A blanket of herself"
She is the sleeping, she is the snow! Reading this I felt seduced and ready to rest, but also challenged to a riddle that I choose not to solve, expecting the woman to awake in Spring, wrapping snow and putting it in the hope chest for the right season, in the hope chest only--not in her heart.
I too liked "a blanket of herself." But instead of hair, it's just my winter girth. Nicely done.
A blanket of herself
thick and sweet-smelling...these lines captured me...there is a bit of magic in your words...and i love how winter loves her back...
Beautiful
This is beautiful. Despite the cold of winter, your words make me feel warm. I love 'a small beating heart within the vast whiteness.'
Stop spying on me at night!
I love:
" A blanket of herself thick and sweet-smelling"
and
" A small beating heart within the vast whiteness."
Ooo...this is excellent!! You capture such a tone with all this white and sleep and the last beat in the poem is such an awesome contrast!!
Oooh! I love the stanza describing the she-bear in the cave, wrapped in her own black hair. Gorgeous read, fulfilling in every way.
Great poem and I LOVE the blanket line a lot!
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