Poetry is just the evidence of life. If your life is burning well, poetry is just the ash. Leonard Cohen

Saturday, July 27, 2013

The Fall

 (As I wrote this poem, I heard it to the tune of Wicked Little Town from Hedwig and the Angry Inch. The words are mine, but the "melody" in my head is blatantly nicked from the Hedwig score.)

The smell of fall is in the air
The golden leaves around you
Remind you he's not there
Remembering the summer heat
and how he left you incomplete
With every one you meet
You leave a piece of you

You know there's only you to blame
He disappeared fast as he came
The hottest flame that burns
Is fire that burns blue

You write his name in all your books
Try not to notice every
disappointed look
You don't feel happy, don't feel sad
Can you miss what you never had?
Were you just mad or naive
that you fell so hard?

You know there's only you to blame
No time for sorrow or for shame
You chose to play his game
and he held all the cards

So now October's left you here
You can't ignore the change
You wear it far too clear
And though it all seems so unfair
He walked away without a care
You barely knew what love was
Believed in what you saw

You know there's only you to blame
You're sure that he forgot your name
You hardly know yourself
and everything feels raw

You are so naked and alone
Your beating heart has frozen
Turned itself to stone
You have no doubt that you'll survive
Convince yourself that you're alive
The prize you set your sight on
Cost you much too dear

You know there's only you to blame
You walked straight into his cold flame
And now you stand in ashes
Choking on your fear

And there is only you to blame
And you will never be the same
The headlights on the night streets
Blind as they come near
The headlights on the night streets
Illuminate your tears.

submitted for Imaginary Garden With Real Toads, Friday Night Raw

and now for the inspiration: John Cameron Mitchell singing Wicked Little Town. Stephen Trask's lyrics are much better than mine!


Susie Clevenger said...

This is wonderful...not only a season but an emotion(s)..

Kerry O'Connor said...

Someone would pay a lot for lyrics as superb as these!!
Emotions are definitely linked to seasons.. October seems a very melancholy time of year to me.

Brian Miller said...

i rather love the fall, but it does come heavy with emotion, that is for sure...i like how you use the seasons in this...and for some reason i really like the close too, the headlights...as it opens it up a bit for me, even adding an unknown...like maybe she is standing in traffic waiting for a car to hit her

Herotomost said...

The hell of it is I read it, listed to the song and then did both together and it was amazing. Alot of emotion locked up in this one, it is crazy to me how one person, and really when you go back over your life, there is usually only one person that can make you feel as completely spent for them as you have described here. there may be different people who made you feel partially this way, but not all the way like you have described. this had a great pace and tone and kerry is right, it could be lyrics to a great tune. thanks for coming out, I thoroughly enjoyed it.

Kay L. Davies said...

Oh, I remember feeling like this, Ms Mouse, must have been an October, too, if I remember correctly. You've done a fine job of this.
(note: One little thing, missing one v in the word survive. Old editors usually stumble over these things.)

Lolamouse said...

Thanks for all the kind comments. I'm glad it didn't seem like too much plagiarism, but I couldn't get the tune out of my head!