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October Rain by Timothy Corbin
October rain makes colors bleed
Bleed from sky to tree to leaves
Leaves the ground in autumn shades
Shades her brown eyes when she grieves.
Grieves a friend she never knew
Knew his soul from words he wrote
Wrote his life as though a song
Song she loved from the first note.
Note how his life embraced hers
Hers far better for the time
Time she wished were ever lasting
Lasting memories, love sublime.
11 comments:
This is very beautiful, Lolamouse, and is in synch with what we have all been thinking this week. I especially love
"her brown eyes when she grieves". I can see them.
I too love the beauty and fond remembrance embraced in your verse~
well done
This is wonderful, Ms Mouse. You chose to repeat words that had different meanings, so the repetition wasn't what the reader noticed, only the depth and meaning of your words.
K
First of love, love the autumn theme, full of remembrance & nostalgia ~ Then the excellent choice of words for repetition (bleed/leaves/shades) ~ You have also used the rhyming scheme for the looping verses ~ A fine example of this form LM ~
Thanks for linking up with Sunday's Challenge & wishing you happy week ahead ~
beautifully looped poem.
This is a lovely poem, LM. There is a wonderful lilting quality created by the repetition and the rhyme.
the sentiments and form work so well together in your write, Lola Mouse ~ M
Perfect pairing of picture and poem!
Rhyming! I'm impressed AND totally enamored with the first two lines. A perfect Autumn poem. Lovely.
This makes me ache. It's such a beautiful tribute. Your words are such a tremendous gift. I don't think you even realize the magic you create.
So beautiful. I love this
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