Poetry is just the evidence of life. If your life is burning well, poetry is just the ash. Leonard Cohen

Monday, January 30, 2012

Not Too Subtle

Red Spot II, Wallisy Kandinsky
I want him to notice me
but not to notice, notice me
know what I mean?
just like, notice that I look nice but
not like I'm trying to look nice
so I'm wearing the jeans
(you know the ones?)
that make my butt look nice
and, OH MY GAWD, my hair is a disaster!
I can't believe I let that bitch 
talk me into bangs
it's not even funny but
at least my mom felt sorry for me
and let me get a mani and
it's so cool 
so yeah
I read in Glamour
that brights are in for make-up so
I bought some new stuff if you wanna borrow
and the lip gloss is called like
Cherry Climax or something
and I absolutely love it but
I hope it's not too subtle.

submitted for The Mag, Mag 102


Laurie Kolp said...

hahaha... this is like so real...

(I love it)

Brian Miller said...

like oh my god, that is totally like awesome...shah....lol....smiles....

Buddah Moskowitz said...

"I hope it's not too subtle."

Perfectly captured.

Tumblewords: said...

A great bunch of glamor, glitz and energy! Love it...

Marcoantonio Arellano (Nene) said...

Not to worry. By the time your close enough for him to notice your Climax, he will have outlined you already, not so subtly, by his eyes in his mind.

hyperCRYPTICal said...

Ah how to get noticed without being to noticable - the dilemma of wanting to be noticed!

Anna :o]

Maggie said...

Like, OMG, been there. Love it, totally. : )

Fireblossom said...

I've been wondering what in the bleep that picture was supposed to be. Now I know. It's a teenage girl's brain scan! I don't know what you've been putting on your corn flakes or your bagels lately, Ms. Mouse, but your writing has taken itself up a couple of levels recently. I'm loving every word you write.

Scarlet said...

a challenge for woman not to be suble, when she really wants to ~

have a good day ~

Isabel Doyle said...

Isn't it great that (most of us) don't stay there? Wonderful response to the painting Lolamouse!

Rachel Hoyt said...

It is so hard to find the perfect balance! Subtlety is an art. Lovely poem.

Steve Isaak said...

Effective, chatty, theme-centric tone to this. Good piece!

Helena said...


Trellissimo said...

A painted lady for this painted picture? Clever. :)