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T-shirt clad belly
Over ripe fruit stretches cloth
Grape bursting its skin
Bump. Pillow. Book stand. Child.
She can not fit in school desk.
submitted for dVerse Poets Pub, Form For All, Writing Visual (tanka)
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Poetry is just the evidence of life. If your life is burning well, poetry is just the ash. Leonard Cohen
11 comments:
Very nice.
And so glad it's not me. :-)
Pearl
ugh.. when kids have babies.. so difficult...well captured..
I love it when I find humor, even awkward, in poetry. This was worth a smile, especially remembering my belly bumping days. Love the year of the haiku poster.
of course that last line, changes everything...wow...babies with babies...i hope there is some support there...
Nice visual of pregnant young teen ~ The last line is telling and powerful ~
I'm thinking teen pregnancy here. Original way of approaching it. Reminded me a bit of Juno. I wonder if it would deter the new found popularity of having children without fathers. It's a crazy hard choice, but many girls are doing it. Prayers for them.
I like the poem and loved the image the first half gave me. Then I felt bad for her...
Nice way to make a point through image without saying it directly. The last line gave away the key to interpreting the rest ;-)
nice picture
You certainly do create a vivid image. Poor kid.
This happens way too often...nice work
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