Day 1 – February 1st – Theme: Freestyle
Imagined sins scream
He takes to the streets to walk
Nervous, noiseless night
Imagined sins scream
He takes to the streets to walk
Nervous, noiseless night
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Poetry is just the evidence of life. If your life is burning well, poetry is just the ash. Leonard Cohen
17 comments:
Haiku is a lie from the pit of hell! :-P
This is great...imagined sins scream
Oooh dis wuz good. :) Liked it very much. Told a lot in a little.
I can feel the atmosphere here, nicely told!
This is a haunting haiku!
nice..i like the contrast of screams in the opening and the noiseless in the last...
They do scream so loud, don't they ~
Nervous, noiseless night
jittery line I can feel! Nicely done ~~
What a cracking start to the Feb challenge! Compliments.
When the nights are nervous, I become nervous too!
Cactus Craft
Awwwwesome!!! A still night with all the deadly secrets it holds - so well described in such few words!!
I would be nervous too.
Of course, I am here in this challenge too ~
(aka Heaven)
Lolamouse, Welcome back to the challenge.. What a way to write a Haiku - breathtaking.. Waiting to read all the twenty nine Haiku from your pen..
Someone is Special
I love this haiku, I can feel the emotional disorder in the character.
i LOVE this, Lolamouse! SO intense, especially for a haiku! i want to know what his imagined sins are. {smile} the last line is striking!
dani ♥
This has something of the quality of the famous "Curious green ideas sleep furiously" sentence, with his mood displaced seamlessly into the streets. Oh, tormented souls...
screaming verse
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