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Poetry is just the evidence of life. If your life is burning well, poetry is just the ash. Leonard Cohen

Monday, January 23, 2012

Love Bites

From Boris Hoppek's Tokyo exhibit "Ever"
Am I pleasing to the eyes, love?
Is my skin glistening with
the luster of pearl?
Is my flesh fresh and firm?
And my scent
Is it clean and new?
I wish to be flawless, whole
when I offer myself to you, love
Then you will see
what competent and thorough work you do
when you tear me apart.

submitted for The Mag 101

22 comments:

Susie Clevenger said...

Oh my...this hits so hard...To present oneself flawless, whole..so when destroyed by another he/she can see without doubt what they have done. Kudos to a great piece.

Hey Monkey Butt said...

Love it!

Yvonne Osborne said...

Ouch. How we work to be flawless only to be torn apart.

Good job on this.

nene said...

Whoa! We should all lQQk inside ourselves and asses whether we have participated in this at one time or another.

Should be a song.

Helen said...

This is great on SO many levels .....

Heaven said...

What an emotional piece... One can draw some conclusions on their relationship. Beautiful writing here ~

Bouncin Barb said...

And yet we keep trying don't we?

Brian Miller said...

oh dang...really nice twist in the end....wonder even then if they would see it...

thingy said...

Yikes. Love does hurt. Nicely done.

Fireblossom said...

Yikes, girl. Good poem, but it must be made-up. I can't imagine feisty you presenting yourself this way.

Summer Rain said...

incredible.

Doctor FTSE said...

Wow! Very powerful Magpie.

Michael said...

insta-fan? this guy

Tumblewords: said...

Brava!

izzy said...

Love the 3 sense dimensions and ending with touch!

darev2005 said...

Mmmmmmmmmmmmmm....................

I like it.

Lucy Westenra said...

That last line punches home.

Paige said...

Your poem captured my breath, the earnest words and the
last line - awesomely vulnerable.

Helena said...

Such a compelling few lines. Love, eh?

Tess Kincaid said...

Unfortunately love does bite sometimes...

Nicholas V. said...

Yes, wonderful! My thoughts revolved around tearing and cutting and biting and eating - but all in the context of love!

Christine said...

agree with Lucy, what a punch