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"Come on, Sarah, you've hardly touched your eggs, and it's almost time for the bus to come."
"They're yucky. I don't like them."
"Oh, come on! They're perfectly fine! Hurry up and eat or you're going to be late."
"I don't like this kind of eggs! It's not the kind Mom makes!"
"Sarah, please. I'm trying, but I can't do everything exactly like Mom."
"I hate this breakfast! You're stupid and you don't even know how to cook eggs right! I want Mom!"
"I miss Mom too, Sarah."
"Daddy? When is Mommy...coming home?"
"I don't know. I wish I did."
"I'm not hungry. I have a tummy ache."
"Hey, I know! How about we go to the Pancake House for breakfast and then I'll drive you to school?"
"Can I get blueberry?"
"Sure."
"With whipped cream?"
"Why not? Come on. Get your coat."
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21 comments:
Sorry about mom not being there but, that's a family who listens! I wanna go with!
I think I have heard part of that conversation before. Nicely done.
Bittersweet tale well told. Wondering here at the possibilities....how did they get here...any hope for resolution. Child's reaction is priceless...and spot on. Well done. Vb
tragic, nicely written, not so easy,eh?
Pretty realistic. Where'd this come from?
Glad it wasn't a 'bashing' dad commentary.
Unless they're french toast made with sour dough bread and chocolate chips in them and mulberry syrup,I will choose not to eat regular pancakes.
This brought tears to my eyes. So innocent.
No more tummy ache..a miracle..really like this one a lot..so true!
Easily bribed, kids, eh? Nice terse realistic dialogue.
LOL, Nice. :-) This made me smile.
Cooking eggs right is no yolking matter.
*smirk*
Sometimes distractions and Daddy's, take away a tummy ache, for but a moment.
I hope this is complete fiction! Also, my daughter was very "hungry" and her "tummy hurt" today. But it could only be relieved by very particular foods. As is usually the case.
Fun to see you write fiction. Many years ago, I wrote nothing but short stories. I didn't write poetry at all. Now it's all topsy turvy.
Wow, interesting take for a short story of an egg.. And not to mention it ended with a light note.. and of course, I am wondering when will mum be returning... *wink*
M.A.S. and nene: Thanks for asking. It's fiction. I've never deserted my daughter, although at age 15 now, I do have fantasies of running away for a while! Unfortunately, I've worked with many kids who've lost parents thru either death or divorce or neglect, etc. so it's familiar territory.
I immediately went to the thoughts of the absent parent... pre-divorce maybe.... Nicely done touching on the emotional pull of these situations, then glancing on the physical ills that can follow.
Good ol' dad - trying to make wrong things right. Eggs have to be just so!
Anna :o]
It ended on a lighter note.. I am glad!
For once I imagines the child feeling left out with her 2nd mom who is trying pretty hard..
This was very realistic and light aired..
See, we are just unable to humor it.. we all so want intense drama around- lolss
Hugs xox
I thought eggs were yucky, too.
Excellent, perfect.
Very good dialogue story.
Life's like that sometimes! Well written - the mood caught beautifully.
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