Full moon
mocks the morning sky
Empty dinner plate
lays on the breakfast table
Night does not end
with the sun
I awoke alone.
submitted for Imaginary Garden With Real Toads, Words Count With Mama Zen
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Poetry is just the evidence of life. If your life is burning well, poetry is just the ash. Leonard Cohen
8 comments:
Mouse, this is a great poem ... you packed much into few lines.
Oh, an epic tale in so few words! Wonderful!
night does not end with the sun....very cool line that...and it sets up the weight of that ALONE well...
WOW! You said so much, with so few words - that is really great writing! The reader begins wondering. These lines could begin a short story!!!!!
Very well done, Lolamouse, nowhere near 50 words but with such depth! Excellent write.
K
Looking inside and outside that window--and scary both ways. Great short phrases full of mind-pictures(the empty dinner plate) add mystery and lots of shadow. Really one of my faves of yours, LM.
I totally agree with the others. Fine indeed!
Killer close! I really like this.
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