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Poetry is just the evidence of life. If your life is burning well, poetry is just the ash. Leonard Cohen

Thursday, June 16, 2011

Love Song of the Sea

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The summer sun sets our bodies to glisten
Sounds of the waves make us stop and listen
Of love and lust the sea whispers discreetly
Lovers can hear it and obey completely
The warm water washes away our past sin
Like Venus we're birthed from the sea to begin
And so like her subjects obey her command
Embrace and make love in the soft ocean sand

submitted for Poetry Jam, Summer Chillin'
and Thursday Think Tank, The Beach/Ocean, at Poets United
and for Thursday Poets Rally, Week 46


Thanks, Jingle and Poets Rally!
I nominate K. Shawn Edgar for the Perfect Poet Award

32 comments:

Laurie Kolp said...

"Of love and lust the sea whispers discreetly"... I love this!

Brian Miller said...

oo la la...just watch where you get the sand...just saying....

Bryce Daniels said...

And here I am stuck in Kansas. Closest thing to a beach here is the sandbox over at the pre-school. Sigh.

Lovely sentiments, well done! You know your craft. The alliteration in "warm water washes" was perfect!

Thank you for your kind words on my tornado story!

Best-

Christine said...

Very beautiful, the words just flowed like a wave.

Fireblossom said...

Okay!

Mary said...

There must be no more wonderful place than to be 'swept away' than on a sandy beach with the ocean sounds in the background! Lovely.

Andy said...

Whether it's called the beach/coast/sea/seaside...the beach always conjures up so many emotions.
"Of love and lust the sea whispers discreetly
Lovers can hear it and obey completely"...nice!

darev2005 said...

In my youth I lived near the sea and spent a good portion of my life in it. Now I am stuck in the center of the country a bazillion miles away from anything. And now and then when I am real quiet i can hear the water calling me. I'm going to have to go back some day.

Helen said...

Perfect mindset for lush and lazy summer.

Jingle said...

amazing.
please nominate a poet for week 47.
Cheers,

Henry Clemmons said...

Sounds like a plan. Thats why I love me some beach. Great job.

Shara said...

Romantic ocean setting, classic ideals of oneness and connection. Something so vast in contrast makes us feel small and need each other more. Great contrast in poetic form. The rhyme works well and the imagery flows smoothly.

Andy said...

Congratulations on receiving the award!

mindlovemisery said...

I agree with Laurie that is a fabulous line! Beautiful and romantic

teric said...

This is beautiful. There is just something about the sea that beckons us all.

Anarchist Girl Scout said...

Very pretty poem, but it reminds me of how uncomfortable sex on the beach actually is. Sad does not belong in some places . . .

abthomas said...

Congrats on the award and the very cool write

Pat Tillett said...

Very nice poem. But watch out for that sand, it gets into places and chafes...
congrats on the award!

blackswanpoetry said...

love the beach very poetic this....nice rally

Ella said...

This is romantic and sweeps one away in their own memories~ Congrats on your award!

jabblog said...

It sounds so romantic - lovely.

Titus said...

Ooh, steamier than I was expecting! Done well, well done.

Mr. Walker said...

A lovely poem, nice rhymes, thoughts, and images.

Richard

Peter Goulding said...

I can just shut my eyes and picture it, despite the rain drumming down outside!

Enchanted Oak said...

Yikes! Such sensual writing. I can hear the whispering sea.

Margaret said...

This really had an ebb and flow to it! The sand, the beach and summer loving'. Hmm, I suggest a HUGE beach towel, though! :)

tallyme said...

Congratulations on the award. And a well written poem, very romantic.

Lena said...

The words simply flowed. And it has kinda rekindled that 'I'd love to do it on a beach' fantasy I had as a young slip of a thing.....*sigh*

tikarmavodicka said...

A lovely summer poem! It's winter where I am so I found this really wonderful to read and warm up my day. such a sensual and playful poem. I enjoyed this a lot. :-)

fordogzsake said...

the rhythm of your words moved along like gentle waves washing upon the shore.

cindyeksuzian said...

I can feel the gentle swish of water on the sand in your words. Very peaceful. A letting go. And congratulations on your award! Cindy

funnygirllola said...

That was beautiful thank you