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Let's take a swim
In the waters of sin
Dip a toe in
That's how we'll begin
But then we'll submerge
Give in to each urge
As our bodies converge
In a heavenly surge
I'll pull you under
Head pounding like thunder
Ripping asunder
All that you wonder
And all that you knew
And did misconstrue
How you need to subdue
A love wicked and true
So come, let's get wet
And never forget
We need not abet
Any saints as of yet
submitted for Poetry Jam, Swim, Swam, Swum
22 comments:
oo la la...now where did i put those trunks....
Ha! You temptress.
well.. dipping the toe in is certainly a good start...but then you need a lot of fresh water to cool down...smiles
Hope you have room for a lot of swimmers!!! This swimming in sin sounds like fun.
Let's take a swim in the water of sin....cool! Good one shot!
This is great fun! I love the rhyme and the way it wanders to that great punch at the end.
..dip a toe in. It does start that way! Fun.
You shouldn't say things like that unless you really mean it. (evil grin)
This is a lovely invitation - how could anyone resist? Guilt comes later . . . maybe;-)
Love the eroticism.
Naughty, but nice... I like it!
"So come, let's get wet
And never forget
We need not abet
Any saints as of yet"
Wow! That may not be very articulate, but it's my real reaction!
Lustful and sensual...well done!
Love this! That's how sin is - you take one bite of chocolate & suddenly the whole tub of ice cream is gone (or was that just me last night?).
I love the simplicity of the line, "I'll pull you under..."
Temptation is your strong suit. This is a jaunty, rhythmical ride deep into it.
I was an innocent youth at the start of the poem...
Peter-
Corrupting innocent youth is just one of my hobbies!
Eek! Wasn't expecting that at 3 o'clock in the afternoon. Love the rhythmic urgency of the urging!
Wow! I'm ready! What a sexy poem.
"In the waters of sin..." it only got better from there! Sounds more like a hot tub to me!
I played this week for the first time. Hope you'll stop by: Free Fall.
Awesome poem! I think I embody the spirit of it sometimes... dragging my friends to party more, etc. :)
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