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Poetry is just the evidence of life. If your life is burning well, poetry is just the ash. Leonard Cohen

Friday, August 3, 2012

Wolves

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Hold me tight
I hear the wolves at my door
Please don't leave me alone now
I do not have the strength to fight

I hear the wolves at my door
I knew they would come for me
But do not have the strength to fight
I am depleted

I knew they would come for me
Strong seeks out strong
But I am depleted
From taming your monsters

Strong seeks out strong
So I will face the fangs
Tamed, your monsters
Sleep now

I will face the fangs
But please don't leave me alone
Sleep now, but
Hold me tight.

submitted for dVerse Poets Pub, Form for All, Pantoum
Imaginary Garden With Real Toads, The Wolf Is Getting Married


24 comments:

Marian said...

strong seeks out strong, that is for sure. love it, what a pretty yet fierce reflection. from a mouse, no less! :)

Ella said...

I like how you made it feel like the stirrings in the night! Yes, hold me tight...Love how you ended this :D

sreeja harikrishnan said...

Nice!....and yes strong seeks out strong.......a wonderful one for the wolf is getting married......

Susan said...

Brilliant combination. The form allows the love and fear of marriage to work through.

Susie Clevenger said...

Love how you were able to use the poem for two challenges. You did an incredible job with the Pantoum form. I didn't even tackle it.

darev2005 said...

Even heroes need to sleep.

I'll stand watch awhile.

Kerry O'Connor said...

I love a pantoum with subtle changes in the repeating lines: that's the real way to write them, in my opinion. This was excellently done to the wolf theme.

Claudia said...

it's good to look them in the eyes and face the fangs..but needs much strength to do so...good when there is someone who holds you..

Laurie Kolp said...

Great combination of the prompts!

Daydreamertoo said...

The writer has strength and yet is needing someone to lean on for strength to be strong too. The wolves can be anything in this too, can't they?
Very powerful in its imagery. Fierce looking wolf pic too :)

Kim Nelson said...

Yours is the second pantoum I've read this morning and I quite like the way the form serves your message. Well done.

Brian Miller said...

nice...love this mouse...the wolves may come but facing them together is def a beautiful thing...and makes it so much easier...

Mary said...

I loved the transitions throughout this poem. First the fear of the wolf, but as the poem goes on the taming and the facing the fangs. Sometimes a person has more bravery than first imagined. Nice.

J Cosmo Newbery said...

Nicely done! I am mulling over trying to do one. I have done villanelles in the past and they are similar in structure.

Semaphore said...

Well done! I like how you so-very-subtly vary the refrain lines, turning the definitive voice into a whisper by the end of the pantoum.

Hannah said...

"Strong seeks out strong
But I am depleted
From taming your monsters"

This segment made me think...how at times when we try to fix other peoples problems we have no more strength to care for ourselves...

Well done!!

lucychili said...

scary journey

Mimi Foxmorton said...

Ha!
I just posted a Little Red Riding Hood blog today over at my Sea Gypsy!

Great minds, eh?

This is great! The pic of the eyes is chilling!

Have a creative week!

*hugs*
Mimi

Sherry Blue Sky said...

So nicely done, Lolamouse. Love the pantoum and you executed it so well. I so relate to being tired of being strong.......

Bryan M. White said...

Somehow there's no place to leave comments on your most recent post "August Hangs", so i had to drop back here. Weird, huh?

Margaret said...

I knew they would come for me

Oh, that is so terrifying. Hopefully her love will hold on tight!

Helena said...

Now THAT's clever! A fab combo.....

Olivia said...

I know this is after a loooooong time! All this while you have been on my mind though. Sending you hugs n love and don't worry, when the wolf comes, I'll stand along with you.

I loved how you have used the repeat line restriction. Very many wishes Dear xoxoxo

mindlovemisery said...

This is wonderful you had this challenging form beautifully