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Poetry is just the evidence of life. If your life is burning well, poetry is just the ash. Leonard Cohen

Monday, July 16, 2012

Yesterday's Dreams

Yesterday's Dreams by Jack Vettriano
Fine cracks form
in the porcelain of your face
as you suck on another cigarette
Already the ashtray is full of pink stained blooms
ground in the dirt and squashed underfoot
You have only a few more good years left
to find someone to love you
So it's the black dress and heels again
and out the door for drinks
Turning your back on the one 
who has loved you all along
and cries himself to sleep.

submitted for The Mag, Mag 126

20 comments:

Helen said...

This is so terribly sad. Nice writing, Mouse!

Brian Miller said...

ouch on the end...ouch...what is it she is looking for...

Jinksy said...

Oh, a sad story indeed...

Little Nell said...

Ah the unrequited love of the man in her life. She may be aiming too high?

Laurie Kolp said...

Sometimes what we're looking for is already there.

nene said...

Wow! Wonderful, Lolamouse. Your romantic fiber and sensitivity really comes out in this one

Gracias for this one, mi amiga!

Irish Gumbo said...

Ouch. It's always the way, innit? I read this, and felt sympathy for them both.

darev2005 said...

And they never realize until it's too late.

Mama Zen said...

This is so sad!

Buddah Moskowitz said...

OMG (and I rarely type that), this is a real swift kick to the heart. Poignant but unflinchingly unsentimental. Just great.

Berowne said...

A complete, well thought-out, effective story...

Paige + Shauna said...

ohhh...the ending so sad and so
unexpected. a fine poem.

Tess Kincaid said...

I would like to think it's never too late to find true love...

Cat or Dog said...

we deal with what we deal with. best we can. no one else can judge us.

Pat Tillett said...

Beautiful and very sad. Sad for the lady and sad for the guy she has no thoughts about.

Kutamun said...

Yet he wull never Go away entirely, though the castle where he sleeps become somewhat remote

Helena said...

Poignant and so, so, true for many a foolish woman....! Excellent, Lola!

Rachel Hoyt said...

Ooh. Interesting interpretation. She doesn't look like she's leaving anyone behind to me, but maybe that is because I'm single. :)

ds said...

Powerful stuff, wonderfully written. Thank you!

J Cosmo Newbery said...

Nice (if sad) twist.