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Poetry is just the evidence of life. If your life is burning well, poetry is just the ash. Leonard Cohen

Monday, July 30, 2012

She Makes the Flowers Bloom at Night


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She makes the flowers bloom at night
She borrows magic from the moon
Collecting stars, she holds their light
and makes the midnight shine like noon.
Pale luna moth from dark cocoon
seeks out her flaming auburn hair.
Enchanted girl with shoulders bare,
unnamed goddess, who can she be?
I would be lifted from despair
if she would shine her light on me.

submitted for Imaginary Garden With Real Toads, A Mini Challenge for Sunday, The Prince (Dizain)


14 comments:

Brian Miller said...

she sounds like quite the lady...smiles...very nicely done to form...

Mama Zen said...

Girl, this is stunning!

aprille said...

This is lovely.
Romantic and sweet. I'm in the mood for sweet these days, when so many things are harsh.aprille.me

Heaven said...

Nice poetry form and rhyming words...I like the pale luna moth and enchanted girl ~

Susan said...

Great little poem! Very gentle and neatly tied off--until I try to stick it with this very ungentle song which makes me wonder if I read it right. Is the poem about sex too?

Kerry O'Connor said...

This is a wonderful ode to the full moon (as I read it) with such a lilting cadence from your word choice. I love the way these lines lifted it all up a notch half way through your poem:

Pale luna moth from dark cocoon
seeks out her flaming auburn hair...

darev2005 said...

Ach. And now I'm reading that poem as an REM song. It fits. Awesome.

Bryan M. White said...

Beautiful!

Lolamouse said...

Susan,

Not at all. As I was writing the poem, I kept hearing the song in my head. Writing about flowers blooming at night reminded me of the title of the song.

Mynx said...

It makes me think of a painting I once did...or maybe one I need to do. Another fairy
So lovely the way your words paint the picture in my mind

Pat Tillett said...

Romantic and REALLY good!

myheartslovesongs.com said...

magical and beautiful and such lovely imagery! LOVE this, Miss Mouse!

Hannah said...

This is smooth...not a hint of forced rhyme or flailing form!! Well done!!

Rachel Hoyt said...

REALLY great poem! I'd like to borrow some magic from the moon. :)