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Poetry is just the evidence of life. If your life is burning well, poetry is just the ash. Leonard Cohen

Wednesday, June 27, 2012

Hell Is Empty


inspired by a line from Shakespeare's The Tempest: "Hell is empty and all the devils are here."

26 comments:

Mama Zen said...

Damn, this is good.

Brian Miller said...

dang....tight way to reframe that quote....this one hits...

Fireblossom said...

OH, ain't it the truth!

razzamadazzle said...

This is so captivating!

Hannah said...

You've captured the mood and feeling of hell here! Well done. Reminds me of someone dying from emphysema.

Pat Tillett said...

Sad and powerful! I believe that all the devils are here...

Kay L. Davies said...

Oh, I love this. "The gloaming hovers" ...gotta love a mouse who uses the word gloaming. And the "vellum skin" ...perfect, Miss Mouse, perfect.
K

Karishma Shetty said...

As sad as old age and growing old can be, you've captured the beauty of this lady so well. 'vellum skin' 'porcelain bones' 'hair like sugar spun' -- so poetic! :)

Victoria said...

This is indeed a strong mood piece, a frightening image of how the end could be.

Susie Clevenger said...

Wow! This is great!! I love it from beginning to the end...you did well to capture the feeling of the bard.

my heart's love songs said...

my out loud response at the ending was "ooooh hoo hoo!"

LOVE this, Miss Mouse!!!

thanks for jamming with us at Poetry Jam!


dani

Kerry O'Connor said...

Whoosh!! This is just amazing work, LM. As a sonnet, it is impeccable, as poetry remarkable and as a response to the prompt: top drawer.

Each quatrain is perfection in and of itself, and the progression of ideas from one to the next builds to that amazing couplet climax. What a brilliant portrait of old age.

Heaven said...

Whew what lines you have selected. I admire that she calls for Death and knows no fear ~ Nice one ~

Mary said...

Whew, that packs a major punch. I truly can understand someone saying "Hell is empty and all the devils are here" under that circumstance!

Daydreamertoo said...

Oh yes indeed. Hell is empty because they're all here.
This is so touching. She is so aware of who and what she is and it seems is content with departing this life too. So delicately written yet so vivid in pictures too.
Lovely.

JANU said...

<3...the pains of old age vividly captured here.

darev2005 said...

That reminds me of a song by Elvis Costello. Called "Veronica". Give it a listen.

Helen said...

Mouse, you captured the emotions, the rawness of aging ~ mind clear, body failing ~ in the process .. composing an awesome poem.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

What a spectacular write! Loved it!

Ella said...

Wow Lolamouse this is brilliant!
I am in awe of every line...
I must read it again...
Powerful and so fits the quote!

Bryan M. White said...

Love this one!

Bryan M. White said...

Love this one!

hedgewitch said...

Tell it, LM--great quote, and a somber but lovely poem to match it.

vivinfrance said...

A well-painted portrait. The last line is a killer!

SaraV said...

Quite the potent ending after lulling me gently with your word painting

Margaret said...

A sweet poem that picks up spunk in the end. :)