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Poetry is just the evidence of life. If your life is burning well, poetry is just the ash. Leonard Cohen

Sunday, October 13, 2013

October Rain

October Rain by Timothy Corbin

October rain makes colors bleed
Bleed from sky to tree to leaves
Leaves the ground in autumn shades
Shades her brown eyes when she grieves.

Grieves a friend she never knew
Knew his soul from words he wrote
Wrote his life as though a song
Song she loved from the first note.

Note how his life embraced hers
Hers far better for the time
Time she wished were ever lasting
Lasting memories, love sublime.

11 comments:

Sherry Blue Sky said...

This is very beautiful, Lolamouse, and is in synch with what we have all been thinking this week. I especially love
"her brown eyes when she grieves". I can see them.

Ella said...

I too love the beauty and fond remembrance embraced in your verse~
well done

Kay L. Davies said...

This is wonderful, Ms Mouse. You chose to repeat words that had different meanings, so the repetition wasn't what the reader noticed, only the depth and meaning of your words.
K

Grace said...

First of love, love the autumn theme, full of remembrance & nostalgia ~ Then the excellent choice of words for repetition (bleed/leaves/shades) ~ You have also used the rhyming scheme for the looping verses ~ A fine example of this form LM ~

Thanks for linking up with Sunday's Challenge & wishing you happy week ahead ~

Laura said...

beautifully looped poem.

Kerry O'Connor said...

This is a lovely poem, LM. There is a wonderful lilting quality created by the repetition and the rhyme.

Anonymous said...

the sentiments and form work so well together in your write, Lola Mouse ~ M

BB said...

Perfect pairing of picture and poem!

Margaret said...

Rhyming! I'm impressed AND totally enamored with the first two lines. A perfect Autumn poem. Lovely.

Crayotic Ramblings said...

This makes me ache. It's such a beautiful tribute. Your words are such a tremendous gift. I don't think you even realize the magic you create.

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So beautiful. I love this