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Poetry is just the evidence of life. If your life is burning well, poetry is just the ash. Leonard Cohen

Saturday, May 18, 2013

Fever



Fitful Sleep by Carolyn Hampton

Fever
Drags me under
I see her in your arms
You say, “What you see is not real”
“It’s only in your imagination”
I fall into a fitful sleep
Maybe I was dreaming
I wake; you smile
Fever?

17 comments:

Grace said...

Fever or a nightmare, perhaps ~ Take 2, dear LM ~ Good work on the form and thanks for playing along ~

Wishing you lovely weekend ~

Mary said...

Hopefully it was a fever and not true! The reader can draw his/her own conclusions, which makes it interesting.

Fireblossom said...

Throwing up might be an appropriate response, either way.

You're welcome.

--The Politeness Lady

Marian said...

uh oh. she gives him fever. watch out!

Brian Miller said...

oy, i might say nightmare...seeing someone else in the arms of your spouse or lover...you kinda leave it ope though for us to decide...hmm...

Peggy said...

Nifty poem that goes well with the illustration--which can be looked at in so many ways. (until I actually figured it out!)

VaNdAnA ShArMa said...

Go away you fever,,,,

asteria's canvass said...

its very close to reality,isnt it??

Kerry O'Connor said...

I like the half in half out of dreams feel of this poem, LM.

aprille said...

You put everythin in those few lines, even dialogue. Free verse controlled. Loved it.

Kay L. Davies said...

Oh, what a fevered mind can make us see, make us believe!
Fabulous response to the poem, Ms Mouse, and I see you have yet another. I'll be back.
K

Helen said...

I'm betting it was real!!!

sharplittlepencil.com said...

Fever dreams have that quality of "is it or isn't it?" I remember having a fever dream in which the white silhouette of my sister rose out of her body and walked around the room. Not so much scary as interesting.

Fever. Excellent choice. Peace, Amy

Ella said...

I love this clever view....that subtle view of between those two worlds ;D

Akila Gopalakrishnan said...

i find this layered. fever of the body nd mind, finally smiles

mindlovemisery said...

I hope its not true and I hope you are feeling well. My husband makes fun of me sometimes for getting grumpy at him after I have had a dream of him doing something horrible but you know he does exactly the same thing, those dreams really hurt!

grapeling said...

a morsel, a delight provided the fever breaks and not your heart