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Poetry is just the evidence of life. If your life is burning well, poetry is just the ash. Leonard Cohen

Tuesday, November 1, 2011

Surrender

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Come to me, she beckons
dark curves seducing me back
to this place of ambivalence
Desire, destruction hopscotch across her body
She smiles
keys cracked and black stained
rotten teeth
meth mouth
gaping hole waiting to be filled
with my words
she mocks my impotence
I wave the white flag

submitted for Magpie Tales 89

13 comments:

Mimi Foxmorton said...

Egads, lovie...........you MUST write! ;)

*hugs*
Mimi

Carrie Burtt said...

What a captivating and brilliant take on the prompt...love this lolamouse....nibble on that!
:-)

Brian Miller said...

wow...kind creepy...meth mouth itself is a scary image....i might wave the flag at that one...

Christine said...

oh the seduction, terrific Magpie

Bekkie In Wonderland said...

You are so talented at writing I only hope I can get half as good as you someday...I'm working hard on it! I have a ? if you don't mind. Under "My Bloggie Friends Give Me Awards" I'd appreaciate that you give me a link back to my site on "The Sunshine Award" I'm the only person that doesn't have one on your list. It would be a great help in bringing me some readers. At least it will get the horses to water, if they drink or not it's up to them. Lol! Hope your Halloween was good and keep up the wonderful writing! ♥

Bouncin' Barb said...

Wow, that was great Lola. Nice job.

nene said...

It will come and the keys shall no longer be at rest.

darev2005 said...

The keyboard is an evil seductress. A vile evil black plastic harpy with her claws dug into my shoulders screeching "Write, you fool! Write!"

Nicholas V. said...

Excellent write! This is writer's block unblocked!
:-)

Pat Tillett said...

POWERFUL! Very good Lola...

Jo Bryant said...

oh wow - scary stuff...
:)

Bee's Blog said...

She smiles
keys cracked and black stained

Wow! You said it - good read.

WyomingDiva said...

Loved that zinger of a last line!