We draw the curtain on today
The scripts and props are put away
Tomorrow's lines remain uncertain
On today we draw the curtain
We move like players scene to scene
Do we remember where we've been?
Always something more to prove
Scene to scene, like players we move
The page is done; the lines are said
Make up washed and costume shed
We crave the solitude of one
The lines are said; the page is done
But you can see inside my shell
No one knows me half as well
From you I do not ache to flee
Inside my shell just you can see
With you I need not wear a mask
I set aside the actor's task
When truth can be hard to construe
I need not wear a mask with you.
submitted for Poetic Bloomings, In-Form Poet, Swap Quatrain
and Imaginary Garden With Real Toads, Open Link Monday
13 comments:
nice...really like that closure...when we find one like that...when no matter what we dont have o wear the mask...that is a treasure worth keeping and caring for...
I like that you rhymed "scene" and "been." Nice!
Very nice. I love it.
Not many people i would take the mask off for. You would be one of them, I think. (grin)
I like the way you unravelled the metaphor, couplet by couplet. Great idea and well-written.
awww, yes, i love the ending. well done! no masks.
I suspected you were a thespian. :-P
Nice poetry form ~ The first and last lines of each verses are written well ~
I like that in the end of the play, we don't need to wear a mask ~ that is a great relief ~
I too like that you find the genuine!
I agree this is a gift to be yourself, your true self~
I enjoyed your poem :D
Beautiful, lolamouse....love the rhythm and meter of this and you rhyme to perfection. I also love that you have that special someone you can be truly seen by.
Ah to not have to wear a mask or act a part...so thankful there are those people I can sit with emotionally undressed
love your use of the form! beautifully written!
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The rhyme is clean, and never feels forced, and the pacing and rhythm is finely down as well. Very solid piece of writing.
The rhyme is clean and unforced, and the rhythm and pacing are done nicely as well. Very solid piece of writing.
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