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Poetry is just the evidence of life. If your life is burning well, poetry is just the ash. Leonard Cohen

Wednesday, March 23, 2011

Battle Creek Cypress Swamp



photo by Temari 2010


The trees are older than our cares
I walk beneath a cypress sky
I hear the barred owl's plaintive cry
And soon forget the day's affairs.

The birds and frogs sing joyful prayers
 The breeze breathes like a lover's sigh
The trees are older than our cares
I walk beneath a cypress sky.

I spy a young deer unawares
 The cypress watch us live and die
The creek keeps flowing by and by
Its secrets with the earth it shares
The trees are older than our cares.


submitted for: One Stop Poetry Form-Rondel
                     One Shot Wednesday-Week 38
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29 comments:

Deborah @ThirtyCreative said...

Your words go perfectly with the picture. A great selection and rhythm.

Christine said...

Beautiful, and graceful tone. Love it.

Brian Miller said...

nice. you paint the swamp well the beig trees...i like the praying frogs...i hear them all the time...nice one shot

Reggie said...

Enjoying the wondrous sights and sounds of life to take us away, if for but a moment.

nene said...

very nice, mi amiga!

Sally J said...

very accessible, with s lovely nod to trees' wisdom and endurance

rallentanda said...

I liked this one..well done!

Claudia said...

oh wow - this is beautiful - and almost perfect
just one small thing - you forgot one line in the last stanza
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apart from this - perfect, smooth flow, great content - kudos!

Laynee said...

Beautiful. I love trees.

Rachel Hoyt said...

Very cool poem! I've never seen this form before. :) It is definitely comforting sometimes to know that certain things, people, issues, etc. have been around far longer than your worries... and are still standing tall. :)

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Kavita said...

Oh... lovely!!! In our life, we get so obsessed with our worries and pleasantries that we forget to notice what's around and who might be watching us... but these old tress, sitting wise and stolid, ever watching..ever knowing.. aren't they just awesome?!?!?

A beautifully written One Shot, Lola... and the image you have chosen is equally pretty!

Rajlakshmi said...

a lovely imagery of the wilderness that we have forgotten...
a beautiful read.

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Sherry Irvine said...

this is so pretty....It would be interesting to know the secrets and stories the trees hold...or would it? xo

Sherry Irvine said...

Lovely poem Miss Lolamouse....trees are awesome...I wrote another comment so I don't know if you got it - sorry if it's duplicated. xo

wordsasunder said...

You just cannot beat a walk in the forest and you have described it well :)

Elaine said...

That was really quite beautiful.

Paulami said...

now i want to walk beneath a cypress sky..
like the imageries..

Shashi said...

Oh yes.. the trees are older than our cares.. loved the feeling and atmosphere around it all...

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Charlie Parant said...

I started writing form poetry recently...I am new to it but I think you did a wonderful job on this one.

1meremortal said...

A wonderfully written poem.

funnygirllola said...

wonderful, it makes me want to go outside. thank you

Jingle said...

love the imagery..

very well done.

pandamoniumcat said...

This is beautiful poem, lovely photo. Thank you for sharing.

JL Dodge said...

one of our favorite forms... Well done
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Dishilicious said...

nice :)

mihirvatsa said...

Hi there, again. :)

Its a cute poem depicting some hidden aspects of reality. Nice...

Vinay said...

the cypress sky does look very beautiful, Lola :) and your words portray them very well. thank u for sharing!

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poetsenvy said...

Those old cypress trees reign over the land,
forever watchful, forever grand,
They protect loved ones with limbs outstretched,and whisper lullabies, no, that's not farfetched. Beautiful trees and a beautiful poem. Thank you.

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