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| photo by Temari 2010 |
The trees are older than our cares
I walk beneath a cypress sky
I hear the barred owl's plaintive cry
And soon forget the day's affairs.
The birds and frogs sing joyful prayers
The breeze breathes like a lover's sigh
The trees are older than our cares
I walk beneath a cypress sky.
I spy a young deer unawares
The cypress watch us live and die
The creek keeps flowing by and by
Its secrets with the earth it shares
Its secrets with the earth it shares
The trees are older than our cares.
submitted for: One Stop Poetry Form-Rondel
One Shot Wednesday-Week 38
29 comments:
Your words go perfectly with the picture. A great selection and rhythm.
Beautiful, and graceful tone. Love it.
nice. you paint the swamp well the beig trees...i like the praying frogs...i hear them all the time...nice one shot
Enjoying the wondrous sights and sounds of life to take us away, if for but a moment.
very nice, mi amiga!
very accessible, with s lovely nod to trees' wisdom and endurance
I liked this one..well done!
oh wow - this is beautiful - and almost perfect
just one small thing - you forgot one line in the last stanza
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apart from this - perfect, smooth flow, great content - kudos!
Beautiful. I love trees.
Very cool poem! I've never seen this form before. :) It is definitely comforting sometimes to know that certain things, people, issues, etc. have been around far longer than your worries... and are still standing tall. :)
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Oh... lovely!!! In our life, we get so obsessed with our worries and pleasantries that we forget to notice what's around and who might be watching us... but these old tress, sitting wise and stolid, ever watching..ever knowing.. aren't they just awesome?!?!?
A beautifully written One Shot, Lola... and the image you have chosen is equally pretty!
a lovely imagery of the wilderness that we have forgotten...
a beautiful read.
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this is so pretty....It would be interesting to know the secrets and stories the trees hold...or would it? xo
Lovely poem Miss Lolamouse....trees are awesome...I wrote another comment so I don't know if you got it - sorry if it's duplicated. xo
You just cannot beat a walk in the forest and you have described it well :)
That was really quite beautiful.
now i want to walk beneath a cypress sky..
like the imageries..
Oh yes.. the trees are older than our cares.. loved the feeling and atmosphere around it all...
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I started writing form poetry recently...I am new to it but I think you did a wonderful job on this one.
A wonderfully written poem.
wonderful, it makes me want to go outside. thank you
love the imagery..
very well done.
This is beautiful poem, lovely photo. Thank you for sharing.
one of our favorite forms... Well done
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nice :)
Hi there, again. :)
Its a cute poem depicting some hidden aspects of reality. Nice...
the cypress sky does look very beautiful, Lola :) and your words portray them very well. thank u for sharing!
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Those old cypress trees reign over the land,
forever watchful, forever grand,
They protect loved ones with limbs outstretched,and whisper lullabies, no, that's not farfetched. Beautiful trees and a beautiful poem. Thank you.
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