I stared up at the ceiling and counted the tiles, trying to distract myself. My attention, however, kept returning to the one directly above my head. It was covered with an old water stain. The rust colored blotch spread out over the tile like dried blood. It seemed so out of place in this building of high tech gadgets and the best trained doctors in the world. "Now try not to move," I heard the lab tech say. I lay on the table, my pregnant belly a souffle about to be poked before it was finished baking. I imagined it collapsing beneath the amniocentesis needle with a "poof!" ending my questionable pregnancy before it even had a chance. I didn't dare look at the ultrasound machine. Instead, I watched the minute hand sweep a slow circle on the wall clock. It was supposed to be over in a minute, and it was. Afterward, I was glad my husband was there to drive me home. I wasn't in pain. Pain would have been welcome. I was numb, with intermittent stabs of terror. I existed in that state for the next 3 weeks.
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11 comments:
Oh, Lolamouse. :-O I'm so glad I found you again. I absolutely LOVE your writing.
I've added you to my blogroll.
Hope you're having a good day so far,
Pearl
Oh wow. That whole thing just made me really uneasy. If that is what you were going for, it worked.
I hope you keep on. There is a lot of emotion in that short piece.
This sounds awful. What did happen?
i want more of this. i need to know more.
whew...without ever addressing it directly you knock us out with emotion...the ceiling tiles, the hand of the clock, the numb....
Three weeks? That's an awful long time to be in limbo. Wow. Great writing.
Oh my, there's so much in this piece!
I feel for you, I'm so sorry.
I have mad respect for how many cards you showed here.
But mostly, I feel for you.
Oh what a memory! I send you a ((hug))
a short but power packed piece.
Wow, there's a lot of suspense here, and I felt like I was in the room with you. I like the contrast of the leaky roof tile with the high-tech medical equipment.
Now THAT is showing off your writing chops.
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