tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post1777167191826438161..comments2023-10-28T07:14:53.152-04:00Comments on Mouse Droppings: Status MigraineLolamousehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12508347229501155001noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-28935177877345253912012-04-01T13:08:37.362-04:002012-04-01T13:08:37.362-04:00This is a fantastic first villanelle. So sorry you...This is a fantastic first villanelle. So sorry you suffer from migraines. That is a lot of pain.Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-68971067240912404842011-01-18T12:13:16.263-05:002011-01-18T12:13:16.263-05:00Nice one! Sometimes pieces written in this form se...Nice one! Sometimes pieces written in this form seem stilted, trying to force the repetitive into those that move the piece forward, but the lines you've chosen fit so well and even enhance the repetitive pressure of a migraine. Thanks for sharing!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-91627207136752816002011-01-16T06:54:52.101-05:002011-01-16T06:54:52.101-05:00Much power and immediacy here
"She counted he...Much power and immediacy here<br />"She counted her breaths, her chest so tight"<br />and the closing ,rhyming lines<br />"She swallowed the pills and said goodnight<br />She closed her eyes against the light."<br />are perfect.<br />Roar on,Ms. Mouse!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-48588700838306822352011-01-15T22:21:51.243-05:002011-01-15T22:21:51.243-05:00I like the rhythm of your dark and melancholic sto...I like the rhythm of your dark and melancholic story. It brings forth questions, and I want to know more; how and why did she come to this point? What happens next?The Reason You Comehttp://thebeatofmydrum.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-26050421699394149632011-01-15T22:12:02.307-05:002011-01-15T22:12:02.307-05:00the Perfect Poet Award Notice, Enjoy! Leave your a...<a href="http://thursdaypoetsrallypoetry.wordpress.com/2011/01/16/the-perfect-poet-award-4-poets-rally-week-37/" rel="nofollow">the Perfect Poet Award Notice, Enjoy! Leave your acceptance link under the post after you take it, Thanks!</a><br /><br />Happy Weekend.Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis Hallhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01546696605935159862noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-68570424415062811082011-01-15T17:53:31.009-05:002011-01-15T17:53:31.009-05:00I love the way you put words together.
Weaving a...I love the way you put words together. <br />Weaving a tale of woe.<br />You leave us hanging... what was her intention.<br />Excellent.debihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09662703402943738169noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-58512951569788850382011-01-14T12:06:25.260-05:002011-01-14T12:06:25.260-05:00powerful piece.
you make it perfect in rhyming and...powerful piece.<br />you make it perfect in rhyming and more...<br /><br />Cheers.<br />Happy Rally.<br /><br />you could visit poets participants NEw to you and explore FRESh poets to explore if you wish...<br />Happy Rally.Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis Hallhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01546696605935159862noreply@blogger.com