tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post7929424693978094161..comments2023-10-28T07:14:53.152-04:00Comments on Mouse Droppings: White Roses (Redux)Lolamousehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12508347229501155001noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-25000222387332607712012-08-31T08:58:51.825-04:002012-08-31T08:58:51.825-04:00Both versions are lovely, but I find I like the se...Both versions are lovely, but I find I like the second, shorter version better. It's cleaner I think, and the images stand out more because of it.Tania Ahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17351618475728982428noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-79889126566535217302012-08-30T19:37:07.860-04:002012-08-30T19:37:07.860-04:00I missed a few of the images from the first... but...I missed a few of the images from the first... but the second carries a nice punch! Margarethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00007201357693227614noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-2299103010721459112012-08-30T19:10:13.186-04:002012-08-30T19:10:13.186-04:00Very powerful and heart wrenching!Very powerful and heart wrenching!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-4683541826838607922012-08-30T13:03:54.295-04:002012-08-30T13:03:54.295-04:00I like the lusciousness of the first one best for ...I like the lusciousness of the first one best for the power of Romance and unrequited love. The second leaves the whiteness open to mystery--does he beat her? I enjoy your power play with paleness. Sometimes it reminds me of a very oldie "A lighter shade of Pale" by Procol Harum. Do you know it?<br />Susanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05723639294340760325noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-7904505244500530622012-08-30T11:38:24.408-04:002012-08-30T11:38:24.408-04:00Both together says much...they are beautiful and c...Both together says much...they are beautiful and complete as two pieces.......sad and haunting image...Sreejahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01395234979504881964noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-4281133166343590242012-08-30T11:34:45.168-04:002012-08-30T11:34:45.168-04:00Both of these are heartbreaking and gorgeous.Both of these are heartbreaking and gorgeous.Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-33959692936184085112012-08-30T10:50:05.623-04:002012-08-30T10:50:05.623-04:00I enjoyed both versions, but the longer version ca...I enjoyed both versions, but the longer version carried more sorrow for me. It made me think of all the wives who laid their beloveds of decades to rest, and how hard that must be. Very sad.PattiKenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02894925987580502697noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-65960771715986790162012-08-30T10:24:50.744-04:002012-08-30T10:24:50.744-04:00This is hauntingly beautiful~
The ending is stunn...This is hauntingly beautiful~ <br />The ending is stunning and sad~<br />Beautifully writtenEllahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06070952447277684613noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-68654104573009668882012-08-30T09:54:47.801-04:002012-08-30T09:54:47.801-04:00The sorrow of love come to an end through death is...The sorrow of love come to an end through death is poignantly felt in your 25-word piece. It is a heart-breaking picture.Kerry O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00720862912375945249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-598886167399515902012-08-30T09:04:23.503-04:002012-08-30T09:04:23.503-04:00Wow. The first one was good. But that second jus...Wow. The first one was good. But that second just zaps you in the heart with the imagery. Awesome.JustRexhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00389126268262607714noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-20630814662855563742012-08-30T08:20:50.046-04:002012-08-30T08:20:50.046-04:00I truly like both versions of this poem. "Pa...I truly like both versions of this poem. "Paler than the petals" really speaks LOUDLY to me!Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07366010389846904663noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-51956683018280177832012-08-30T00:57:34.300-04:002012-08-30T00:57:34.300-04:00Ha ha...the same thing happened to me...I have two...Ha ha...the same thing happened to me...I have two versions also! <br /><br />I love how both state the same...wow, well done!Hannahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10124956200834969600noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-26133014231874328042012-08-30T00:57:34.002-04:002012-08-30T00:57:34.002-04:00Ha ha...the same thing happened to me...I have two...Ha ha...the same thing happened to me...I have two versions also! <br /><br />I love how both state the same...wow, well done!Hannahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10124956200834969600noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-43408497308382678942012-08-30T00:04:27.707-04:002012-08-30T00:04:27.707-04:00I enjoyed both versions of your poem ... amazed th...I enjoyed both versions of your poem ... amazed that you could pare down to just 25 words and not lose the impact.Helenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16619199535376925989noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-65635964867318451782012-08-29T21:55:42.391-04:002012-08-29T21:55:42.391-04:00This is beautifully poignant........I assume you a...This is beautifully poignant........I assume you are writing about someone else, as I recall you being happily married? Lovely images, and you wrote it so well.Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-79076001799414016022012-08-29T21:52:48.182-04:002012-08-29T21:52:48.182-04:00wow, emotive....made me think of a soldier's w...wow, emotive....made me think of a soldier's wife, a hard loss...felt the thorn in my palm....tight write...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.com