tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post5468742878595219954..comments2023-10-28T07:14:53.152-04:00Comments on Mouse Droppings: GriefLolamousehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12508347229501155001noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-35455598653944123682011-03-28T23:06:54.858-04:002011-03-28T23:06:54.858-04:00This is really beautiful. The rhythm and rhyming a...This is really beautiful. The rhythm and rhyming are perfect and the repetition really works well. Super-good writing!Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-72705070617116297852011-03-03T09:38:15.666-05:002011-03-03T09:38:15.666-05:00It's a Pantoum!!!! Excellent use of the form....It's a Pantoum!!!! Excellent use of the form. The repetition works really well here.Rachel Hoythttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12565668664072704971noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-45598706560668787792011-03-02T22:16:50.050-05:002011-03-02T22:16:50.050-05:00smart piece.smart piece.Hyde Park Poetry Palacehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04817313233737719262noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-43646567292908652122011-02-27T17:56:14.905-05:002011-02-27T17:56:14.905-05:00Pieced many a puzzle, too. Heartfelt 'pie!Pieced many a puzzle, too. Heartfelt 'pie!Helenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13447013188405986054noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-38574962598421128182011-02-25T23:40:36.308-05:002011-02-25T23:40:36.308-05:00Kavita,
Thank you so much for your thoughtful and ...Kavita,<br />Thank you so much for your thoughtful and kind comments. I really appreciate it.Lolamousehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12508347229501155001noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-13179406854003646442011-02-25T20:09:49.148-05:002011-02-25T20:09:49.148-05:00(sigh)... it's so sad.. but so very true too.....(sigh)... it's so sad.. but so very true too... <br />It's very hard to find the right pieces of this macabre puzzle called life, when it is hit by grief... <br />So well written, Lola.. and I am totally awe-inspired by your rhyme scheme! I mean, you've used only TWO rhymes for the ENTIRE poem... that's like WOW!!! <br /><br />Kudos on this excellent magpie, my friend!!Kavitahttp://kavisionz.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-54520298539934291812011-02-24T13:46:23.688-05:002011-02-24T13:46:23.688-05:00So poignant. Perfect metaphor for grief.So poignant. Perfect metaphor for grief.Tess Kincaidhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04889725786678984293noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-70829707961627328432011-02-24T07:05:06.383-05:002011-02-24T07:05:06.383-05:00This fits puzzle pieces well, beacause of the repe...This fits puzzle pieces well, beacause of the repetitions. How often do we pck up a piece before we find its correct reating place in the final picture?Trellissimohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02283663872471564907noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-4781796057356780462011-02-23T20:52:45.125-05:002011-02-23T20:52:45.125-05:00Grief is a puzzle and I am trying myself to work t...Grief is a puzzle and I am trying myself to work through the different pieces but somedays I just can't seem to find the edges.Kristen Haskellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07481526316071592146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-3895847106253715632011-02-23T16:55:43.758-05:002011-02-23T16:55:43.758-05:00Oh, how true. Sadly so.Oh, how true. Sadly so.Tumblewords:https://www.blogger.com/profile/04279038951489894119noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-83996979281411975922011-02-23T14:45:24.111-05:002011-02-23T14:45:24.111-05:00Grief conveyed very well in this traditional form....Grief conveyed very well in this traditional form.Doctor FTSEhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10052101566471519778noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-43083092949001423922011-02-23T13:05:51.332-05:002011-02-23T13:05:51.332-05:00wonderfully poignant possibly to the level of bein...wonderfully poignant possibly to the level of being a catharsis for someone.Marcoantonio Arellano (Nene)https://www.blogger.com/profile/10713672589582754484noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-12054857564032221592011-02-23T12:35:34.557-05:002011-02-23T12:35:34.557-05:00wow, you captured that feeling perfectly!wow, you captured that feeling perfectly!Corvus Venhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04159444855224152987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-77637492514478104332011-02-23T11:09:23.361-05:002011-02-23T11:09:23.361-05:00Grief, when nothing seems to fit anymore. Nicely w...Grief, when nothing seems to fit anymore. Nicely written piece.<br /><br /><a href="http://poetry-24.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow">Poetry24…where news is the Muse</a>Martinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13494219959077922220noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-90157383005014783042011-02-23T06:05:34.824-05:002011-02-23T06:05:34.824-05:00Loved the form in this poem, it worked really well...Loved the form in this poem, it worked really well, and very moving content.Louisehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05912071192179983603noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-11346992223446835982011-02-23T05:40:01.204-05:002011-02-23T05:40:01.204-05:00capturing pain, any feeling in form poems is quite...capturing pain, any feeling in form poems is quite a tough game. You did it wonderfully.<br /><br />trisha.trishahttp://sharmishthabasu.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-74966024121043926762011-02-22T20:41:47.840-05:002011-02-22T20:41:47.840-05:00Am I right..a Pantoum? One of my favorite forms.....Am I right..a Pantoum? One of my favorite forms..The repetition really works in a very hypnotic way..like this a lot!Lynhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11985979258848310351noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-56214520884387726002011-02-22T20:07:52.971-05:002011-02-22T20:07:52.971-05:00Yes grief feels like broken pieces, but eventually...Yes grief feels like broken pieces, but eventually those pieces of life all fit again, sometimes it's the picture of the puzzle that changes.Christinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10433262472050607402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-30617231884557794412011-02-22T18:20:43.829-05:002011-02-22T18:20:43.829-05:00This kind of grief is overwhelming .... one wonder...This kind of grief is overwhelming .... one wonders if it is ever possible to overcome.Helenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16619199535376925989noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3907193349185074114.post-44721712456786629052011-02-22T17:23:03.000-05:002011-02-22T17:23:03.000-05:00Very sad piece.
Grief truly is like a puzzle with...Very sad piece.<br /><br />Grief truly is like a puzzle with many missing pieces.Maggiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00903678715925613725noreply@blogger.com